You exercise regularly and have been a member of many different gyms. Recently you moved into a new neighbourhood and joined a new gym. You have noticed people at this gym do not bother to wipe down the machines after use and often leave dirty towels on the benches in the changing rooms. Write to Mr Koto, the manager. In your letter: Explain who you are Describe the problem exactly Make suggestions to improve the gym
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Dear Mr. Koto,
My name is Tajinder Singh. I recently moved
due to
my new job posting in this
area and became a premium member of your gym after reading good reviews about your gym.
Unfortunately, I am writing this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with the irresponsible behaviour of some members of the health club, who always leave machines full of sweat and do not bother to clean them after using them. Moreover
, some individuals just throw dirty towels and wipes on the benches in the changing rooms and do not even make the effort to use a laundry basket. So, It is a very unhygienic practice for them and can cause many health-related issues.
In the end, I would appreciate it if you could make some strict rules and regulations for using all types of equipment of the health club with a penalty if someone does not follow them. Please give the matter your immediate attention.
Thank you in advance for your time.
Yours sincerely,
Tajinder SinghSubmitted by tajinder.panag on
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To enhance task response, include more specific examples or suggestions. For instance, propose a sign reminding users to wipe down machines or request increased monitoring by gym staff.
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