The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from

 sugar cane.
The
ilustration
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illustration
given shows the manufacturing
process
from
sugar
cane
to
sugar
.
Overall
, it is explicit that there are seven stages in the manufacturing
process
. It starts with growing
sugar
cane
and ends with drying and cooling.
Firstly
,
sugar
cane
may grow up to 12 to 18 months before the harvest season. When it's already ripe, harvesting
done
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through two different
method
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which may done by machine or manually
harvested
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.
Then
, the production
process
ends with crushing
sugar
cane
to extract its juice.
Furthermore
, the juice will be
transfer
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to
limestone
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a limestone
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filter to enter the purifying
process
.
Next,
the juice enters the evaporator to create syrup out of it. In order to obtain
sugar
crystal
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crystals
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from the syrup
then
it needs
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a centifuge
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centifuge
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centrifuge
process
. The cycle of manufacturing
sugar
then
ends with drying and cooling the
sugar
crystal.
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