Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think it is essential for us to learn history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
History
plays a crucial and significant role in everyone
life because people can control themselves to their roots Change noun form
everyone's
also
Correct word choice
and also
ot
enhances the knowledge and information about their ancestors. Some people argue that it is a waste of time and others think it is important to have Correct your spelling
it
history
subject in the schools . I believe that it is not worth to attend
Change the verb form
attending
history
classes.
To begin
with , history
has been introduced in the
academic studies Correct article usage
apply
since
so long, Change preposition
for
children
have access to know about their ancient culture which connects them with their culture and beliefs. Some of them opt it as a profession and decide to become Correct word choice
that children
history
teacher and archaeologist. Add an article
a history
This
will emphasize in
the culture of the country and generate revenue for the higher authorities. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, every year many archaeologists do research and found
different and unique items which will show in the exhibitions Wrong verb form
find
hence
, become attraction
for tourists.
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attractions
On the other hand
,and
I Correct word choice
apply
aslo
believe that there are so many other subjects that are more significant which include science and math. A nation Correct your spelling
also
need
more engineers and doctors to serve the country and maintain the Change the verb form
needs
well being
of Add a hyphen
well-being
public
. Add an article
the public
Moreover
, pay rates are higher in these professions which Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
lead
adolescents to live Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
lavish
Add an article
a lavish
life
and support them financially. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
, hourly
pay rate of doctors in Correct article usage
the hourly
USA
is 100 dollars as per Correct article usage
the USA
survey
majority of the students enroll in medical and Correct article usage
the survey
non -medical
streams to complete their Correct your spelling
non-medical
degree
.
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
To conclude
, other subjects are super beneficials
for the pupils as compared to Correct your spelling
beneficial
the
Correct article usage
apply
history
, this
subject can be opt out of children's interest however
, the profession of doctors, nurses and engineers have more respect as it Add the comma(s)
, however
is count
in white collar job .Change the verb form
is counted
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Introduction
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