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The addiction tho the internet is a widespread problem. What problems does it cause and what is a suitable solution

#addiction #tho #internet
Nowadays, using mobiles and electronic devices
become
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is becoming
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 more and more and everyone
addicted
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 to the
internet
in
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all over the world.
This
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disuss
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discuss
 the over
use
to
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of
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the internet
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internet
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 is harmful to our
lifes
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lives
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 and our health, and we suggest
to limit
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this
 problem from
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 by inserting different
activites
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activities
do
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that do
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 not need
internet
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the internet
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 to be done . Everyone from adults to children
are
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is
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 addicted to the
internet
 these days , and we
are not consider
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 the harm that
they
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it
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 can cause
it
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.
Firstly
 looking at
screen
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the screen
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 of
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone for a long time and
use
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using
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 it without control will impact our sense of sight and
also
 lead to
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a rush eye headache
at
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most of the
times
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.
Also
, it will affect
on
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our communication skills , where
in
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result
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the result
a result
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 of over using
internet
 we may not be able to talk or go throw discussion
for
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as others who
use
 it in
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limited
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.
For example
 , in 2020 children in Australia are more
likly
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likely
 to play with
Ipads
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iPads
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 rather than play with others and talk to each
others
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other
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. In order to solve
this
 issue , there are many solutions but there is a significant one that can reduce
this
 habit,which
it
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is
make
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a rules
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rules
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in
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for
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 using
internet
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the internet
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.
Moreover
, put a specific time to
use
 Ipads and
electric
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 devices in
home
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the home
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 by parents to
the
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young boys and girls , and prevent using them during eating lunch or dinner ,
also
 when sitting with family everyone
togeather
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together
 it must be panned ,
this
 will strongest our relationships , and make our life
more
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healthier.
For example
 , in 2022 , girls and boys in the United Kingdom are more clever and creative
also
 they
registering
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 in school competitions because there is a rule to not buy tablets until they
be
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 17 years old.
To conclude
, overusing mobiles is a primary cause that
results
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results in
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 a weakness in communication skills , and the most of
times
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time
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 wearing medical glasses ,
however
 m it can be addressed through
make
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making
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a rules
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rules
a rule
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 to make people more aware the real life and family.
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