the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The scheme given provides information
of
how the Change preposition
on
prosedure
recycling of Correct your spelling
procedure
alumunium
Correct your spelling
aluminium
drinks
cans.
Overall
, there four
main stages to recycling these waste cans Add a missing verb
are four
drinks
, in order first gain Correct word choice
and drinks
rubbish
from centre
collection, grouping the Add an article
the centre
rubbish
in factory
, Add an article
the factory
a factory
alumunium
recycling plan, and Correct your spelling
aluminium
the
Correct article usage
apply
last
one
put to Correct pronoun usage
apply
drinks
machines.
To begin
, waste alumunium
of Correct your spelling
aluminium
drinks
collected and be selection which is part of rubbish
Correct article usage
the rubbish
that is
looking for, then
is brought by truck to the factory industry. Here the rubbish
is grouping
become some Wrong verb form
grouped
batch
to be Fix the agreement mistake
batches
continue
in the next stages. After that, the Wrong verb form
continued
alumunium
is recycled use
hot temperatures until Wrong verb form
using
melt
down Correct subject-verb agreement
melts
then
Correct word choice
and then
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
new
Correct article usage
a new
alumunium
with bar
shape Correct article usage
a bar
then
alumunium
roll
, and Fix the agreement mistake
rolls
is formed
new cans. The Wrong verb form
forms
last
step is put
on the Fix the infinitive
to put
drinks
machine and ready for use in publics
. Fix the agreement mistake
public
The example
of Correct article usage
Example
alumunium
Correct your spelling
aluminium
drinks
waste is merk coca cola, sprite, and also
starbuck
, Correct your spelling
Starbucks
fanta
.Change the capitalization
Fanta
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