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the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The scheme given provides information
of
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on
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 how the
prosedure
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procedure
 recycling of
alumunium
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aluminium
drinks
 cans.
Overall
, there
four
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are four
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 main stages to recycling these waste cans
drinks
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and drinks
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, in order first gain
rubbish
 from
centre
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the centre
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 collection, grouping the
rubbish
 in
factory
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the factory
a factory
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,
alumunium
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aluminium
 recycling plan, and
the
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apply
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last
one
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apply
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put to
drinks
 machines.
To begin
, waste
alumunium
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aluminium
 of
drinks
 collected and be selection which is part of
rubbish
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the rubbish
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that is
 looking for,
then
 is brought by truck to the factory industry. Here the
rubbish
 is
grouping
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grouped
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 become some
batch
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batches
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 to be
continue
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continued
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 in the next stages. After that, the
alumunium
 is recycled
use
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using
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 hot temperatures until
melt
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melts
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 down
then
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and then
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become
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becomes
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new
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a new
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alumunium
 with
bar
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a bar
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 shape
then
alumunium
roll
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rolls
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, and
is formed
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forms
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 new cans. The
last
 step is
put
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to put
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 on the
drinks
 machine and ready for use in
publics
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public
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.
The example
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Example
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 of
alumunium
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aluminium
drinks
 waste is merk coca cola, sprite, and
also
starbuck
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Starbucks
,
fanta
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Fanta
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words alumunium, drinks, rubbish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Recycling bins
  • Collection centers
  • Sorting
  • Debris
  • Compacting
  • Molten aluminium
  • Purification
  • Ingots
  • Rolled
  • Manufactured
  • Distribution
  • Energy consumption
  • Efficiency
  • Lifecycle
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