In many workplaces, online communication is becoming more commonplace than face-to-face meetings. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the era of modern technology, communication can be done easily. In many offices,
online
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conversation is commonly
to use
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instead
of
eyes-to-eyes
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eyes-to-eye
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meetings. I agree with
this
statements
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statement
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that people
perefer
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prefer
to communicate by online before directly
meet
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. I
also
believe
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have advantages and disadvantages. I will first focus on the advantages first
then
moving
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to look at
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
To begin
,
online
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conversation is
flexsible
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flexible
to do wherever you are and whenever you are. People should not
to
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make
schedule
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schedules
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and match each
others
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other
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.
Also
, they
is
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are
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not
dependen
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dependent
on the time limit.
For example
, imagine that the manager has
agreement
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with
cliens
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clients
client
to discuss make
proposal
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a proposal
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but they are in the different
country
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countries
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and it is impossible to
flight
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because
of
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apply
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the deadline is tomorrow. So,
utilize
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utilising
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modern
thechnology
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technology
like
zoom
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meeting
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meetings
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is the best choice
to do
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.
Beside
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that, it dont
spend
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take
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much
many
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money
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to go restaurant or office for
meeting
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a meeting
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. To move
one
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from one
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place to
other need
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another needs
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accomodations
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accommodation
, even if the place is
quiet
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quite
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far, it will use more than two transportation. After arrived the place, they must buy meals or at least
kind
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some kind
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of
drinks
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.
On the other hand
, direct mee
also
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is also
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needed
because
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certain conditions. The communication between the bride and designer can not
do
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be done
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online because
this
is really
risk
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a risk
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to happend
misunderstand
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misunderstandings
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. The bride must be there in the designer's store to choose and
custom
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customise
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the dress that she
want
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wants
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, especially the size of her body should
be determine
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be determined
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.
Moreover
,
conversatione
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conversation
conversations
face-to-face can build dan strengthen chemistry
each
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with each
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others
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other
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. A family with some members is separated because of busy have to meet in
christmas
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Christmas
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and chat up in dining room. They make
barbaque
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barbeque
and laugh
for
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at
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something funny, it is
very
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a very
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remakable
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remarkable
memories
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memory
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to have. It only can
happend
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happen
if they meet.
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