Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It appears that you've provided two separate letters rather than an essay discussing the provided topic about museums and art galleries. Please ensure you write an essay that relates directly to the statement given, expressing whether you agree or disagree with the necessity of museums and art galleries in the age of digital access to historical objects and artwork.
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