describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
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The graph predicts the gross usage of domestic products in
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last
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the last
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forty years in wealthy,
gobilised
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globalised
and non -
gobalised
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globalised
globalized
countries
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from
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the year
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year
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years
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1960 to 1990.
Firstly
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, there is
extraordinaray
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extraordinary
extraordinarily
growth of local products from
gobalisers
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globalizers
globalised
and there
extragavant
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extravagant
decrease
of
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in
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local products from wealthy
countries
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.
In addition
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, in 1960 the highest
proporation
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proportion
of locally produced goods
were
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bought by wealthy
countries
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was 4.8% respectively,which almost got fall down to 2.8% by the year 1970 and
further
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decliced
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declined
to
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from
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2.1% to 2.0%
till
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from
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1980 to 1990.
However
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,there was constant growth of
gobalisers
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globalizers
globalised
from 1.8% in 1960 and almost touched 4.9% in
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the past
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30 years till 1990 as
compare
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compared
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to wealthy
countries
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. In conclusion, all three sectors
reamained
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remained
remain
unchanged between 2.9 to 3.2
percent
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per cent
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in
1970s
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the 1970s
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.
moreover
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, non -
gobalisers
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globalised
globalizers
gdp
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GDP
decreased in
year
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the year
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1980 to 0.9
percent
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per cent
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and got
slight
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slightly
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increased in past years 1.9%respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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