describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
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The graph depicts the average annual gross domestic growth of internal products in three different categories namely, Globaliser, non-globalisers and wealthy countries.
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, it is evident that
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products from wealthy countries dropped as the years went by
whilist
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while
those from
globalisers
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globalised
spiked up with time. Products from non-globalisers
on the other hand
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, showed variation in the percentages reported in the given years. Looking into detail, with regard to the bar chart, the highest numbers reported were from
globalisers
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globalised
globalists
in the year 1990s
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the lowest values given were from
non-globalisers
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non-globalised
in
1980s
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. In the 1960s yields from the globalisers had
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odds but
then
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picked up in the following years and
finally
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, stood out to be the outstanding producers in the 1990s.
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, the wealthy countries that had outshined their competitors in
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had drawbacks with time and
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recorded the least value in
1990s
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that it had never reported there before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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