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The two pictures compare the current layout of the ground floor of a house with a plan to redesign the same living space.

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The two images compare the current layout of the ground
floor
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 of a house with a plan to redesign the same living space. It can be seen that the original design proposal involved a number of alterations to the ground
floor
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 of the house, mainly in the central
hall
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 area. There are no plans to modify the exterior walls or the entrance. The most noticeable shift from the existing to the proposed
floor
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 plan is that there will no longer be a separate
hall
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 area when the building work is completed.
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 will be achieved by removing internal walls and doors between the
hall
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 and living room,
along with
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 the current stair and under-stair storage cupboards. In the absence of a separate
hall
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 area, the proposed living room would
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 contain a staircase to the first
floor
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. To replace the current straight staircase, a fresh set of winding stairs will be installed in the corner of the living room. The inner door between the
hall
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 and the kitchen will
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 be replaced with a double door linking the kitchen to the current
sitting-room
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sitting room
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.
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, the planned building work will
also
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 include the installation of some kitchen furniture.
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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to include an introduction that paraphrases the task question and provides an overview of the comparisons you will make.
logical structure
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs including an introductory paragraph, body paragraphs for each main point, and a concluding paragraph summarizing the changes.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs, ensuring that the essay has a clear and logical flow.
supported main points
Fully develop your ideas with more specific details and examples to illustrate the changes between the current and proposed designs.
complete response
Ensure that you provide a complete response to the task by covering all key features of the plans, making direct comparisons where relevant.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify your ideas by providing more comprehensive descriptions of each change, explaining the purpose or benefit when appropriate.
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples from the diagrams to support your comparison, such as the exact position of the new staircase or the dimensions of the new living room area.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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