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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The picture denotes the floor plan of a public library 2 decades ago and today.
Overall
, there are several parts that have been changed, and other sections have been deleted between 20 years ago and now. Library
in
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20 years ago,
entrance
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the entrance
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 was located in
South
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the South
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. Beside of gateway, there
were
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was
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enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk
in
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on
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right
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the right
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 and
reading
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a reading
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room
in
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on
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left
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the left
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. In the
central
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 of buildings, there were tables and chairs. In
right
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the right
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 and left
section
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sections
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 of tables and chairs were adult non-fiction and fiction
books
. In
North of
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 parts, there were children's
book
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books
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in
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on
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right
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the right
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 and CDs,
video
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videos
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 and computer games
in
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on
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left
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the left
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. There are several distinctions of the library today. There is
cafe
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a cafe
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in
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on
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right
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the right
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 of
gateway
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the gateway
a gateway
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, and
computer
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the computer
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room
is
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has been
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 moved becoming in
left
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the left
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 of
gate
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the gate
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. The tables and chairs are deleted so that in central
of
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buildings
is being
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are
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 empty. Adult
finction
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fiction
books
is
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are
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 changed becoming all reference
books
, and in part of central's
right
, there is
information
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an information
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 desk. In section of North, there are lecture
room
in
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on
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right
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the right
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 and children's fiction
books
in
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on
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left
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the left
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, and
also
 there adds the story
telling
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story-telling
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 events in the same
room
of
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on
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children's
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the children's
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 fiction
books
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words right, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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