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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The maps illustrate how a waterfront
area
of a town called Darkwind changed from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
, the most significant changes can be seen in the central
area
of the town,
while
all of the industrial areas were removed and
thereafter
the town was mainly used for residential purposes. Meanwhile, most of the facilities surrounding the lake remain unchanged. Over the course of five years, the school Convention Center fishing
area
to the north and the two swimming pools to the South of the lake remain intact. In the southern
area
, a footpath stretching from the western main road has been constructed between the lake and the school, replacing the industrial
area
previously located there. On the western side of the
area
, a new building was built for university education,
while
three new blocks of residential buildings were erected, raising the total number of buildings to six. The
area
to the South, previously an industrial
area
, was replaced with vegetation.
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