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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart given provides information about the
presentage
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percentage
present age
 of renewable energy supply in
Australia
,
Sweden
,
Iceland
, and
Turkey
 between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
, Both
Iceland
 and
Turkey
 have
the
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a
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 higher proportion
energy
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of energy
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 power
was
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apply
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providen
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provided
 in all
years
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the years
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compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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Australia
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to Australia
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 and
Sweden
 were opposite proportion.
According to
 the data, it
isn noticable
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is noticeable
 that
Iceland
was
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had
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 the peak amount
power
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of power
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. it was very clear, in 2010
Iceland
 had 70% power
compare
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compared
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 Aussie and
Sweden
 around 5%, the gap was more than 70%.
Likewise
, in the years 1997 and 2000 ,
Iceland
also
have
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has
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 been higher at 60 and 50
compare
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compared
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Turkey
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to Turkey
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 which
were
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was
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 40 and just under 40.
On the other hand
,
country
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the country
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provide
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providing
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 energy was
in contrast
,
Iceland
 has gradually
rose
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risen
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 but
Turkey
 is stable. Between
Australia
 and
Sweden
 there
was
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were
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no
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not
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 many differences because their amount
almost
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was almost
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same
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the same
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, just opposite year,
while
 in1997 has the soar of
Australia
 but in 2000 was the
rose
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rise
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 of
Sweden
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, sweden, iceland, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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