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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
The graph illustrates a median increase
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 gross domestic product in developed countries,
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globalisers
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globalised
 and
non-
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non-globalised
globalisers
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 in a period from 1960
untill
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until
 1990 years. It is evident from the data that
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globalisers
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globalised
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gdp
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GDP
 grew steadily. On
other
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 hand, there was a reverse situation with a wealthy part of the world.
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, 1960 witnessed a peak of an average
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gdp
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GDP
 in
a rich countries
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rich countries
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, followed by a rapid decline
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 more than one point five
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percent
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 in the next decade.
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, it is interesting to note that
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globalisers
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globalists
 had
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a tottaly
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tottaly diffrenet
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totally different
trend
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 in
a
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apply
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comparison with
a
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wealthy countries. Thier
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gdp
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GDP
 had
grew
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for
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 3,5
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percent
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 by 1990. It is noticeable that non
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globalisers
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globalised
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gdp
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GDP
 had fluctuated in a given period of time. After increasing
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 0,9
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percent
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 numbers dramatically fall down reaching the lowest point among all analyzed data.
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this
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for
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 around 0,5
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Vocabulary: Replace the words globalisers, gdp, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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