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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and polution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #polution #measures
The line graph presents the number of foreigners in three particular areas
such
 as
coast
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the coast
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,
mountains
 and lakes in European
destination
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destinations
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 from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, the total number of overseas visitors
is
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increased throughout the given period in all three categories. Amount of people who went to the
coast
 and
mountains
expected
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 to double in both cases, from 20 and 40 in 1987 to almost 40 and 80
thousands
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thousand
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. Visitors
of
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to
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 lakes grew from 10 to the highest point of 75 and over the
last
 5
years
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years,
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 it has been decreasing to 50
thousands
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thousand
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. The number of foreigners who visited the
coast
, despite the slight drop until 1992,
is
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increased throughout the given period.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of tourists who chose the lake
like
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as their destination increased dramatically between 1987 and 2002, but in the final five years
this
 was surpassed by those who went to the
coast
. In the comparison of the
last
 trend of popularity of the
mountains
 which increased steadily.
To sum up
, the
mountains
 were not
such
 popular as
two
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the two
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 other options. The gap between the three destinations had not narrowed in the end but it has grown up.
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task achievement
Make sure to address the essay topic directly. Your introduction should clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the idea that increasing petrol prices is the best solution to traffic and pollution problems. Follow this with a well-structured argument that supports your position.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs. Transition words like 'furthermore', 'however', and 'consequently' can help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Provide a clear introduction that outlines the main argument and a conclusion that summarizes the key points of your essay. Ensuring that these elements are present will frame your essay effectively for the reader.
task achievement
Support your main points with relevant examples or evidence. Including specific details can strengthen your argument and demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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