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Traffic congestion is becoming problomatic inmajor cities what solutions can be suggest to help to solve the problem

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A bunch of big cities across the globe have
facing
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 the same plight concerning mobility and the
increasely
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increase
traffic
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in traffic
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 on the roads in the
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 decades. It occurs as a direct result of car purchases and
development
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the development
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 of metropolitan areas.
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, the urban area merely
afford
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 with the same speed
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 development, resulting in roads crowded by cars. Many initiatives have been suggested by specialists in urban development to avoid
congestions
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congestion
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. Car-sharing, public transportation, and infrastructure enhancement to
fodern
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modern
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the bike
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bike
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bikes
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 are some options to minimize the circulation of personal
transports
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transport
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.
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, as more individuals
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trasport
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transport
 facilities to achieve their commitments, as less
congestions
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congestion
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 in the central areas.
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,
these kind
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 of changes require interest from
all
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the population and unfortunately, people
perfer
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prefer
go
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to
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working
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 in their own cars,
instead
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 of going by bus or bike.
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 that, the government should play a huge role
investing
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in investing
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 in bike lanes, traffic signs, and urban facilities to afford
confort
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comfort
 and safety to the users.
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, local rules can help
population
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the population
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to
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apply
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deal with traffic and make it flow until the prior suggestions
being
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 applied. In many cities in Brazil,
for instance
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, there is a scheme of rotation, guided by the
last
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 numbers of car's license plates and the even and odd days in the calendar. It is true that it does not solve the main problem,
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, it makes
the
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car usage possible.
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, it is necessary that people engage in
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 their daily
trasportation
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transportation
 for public ones or
bicycle
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bicycles
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 on
week days
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weekdays
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, guided by the
govenment
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government
 giving the necessary structure and conditions to make the city less busy.

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coherence cohesion
You've addressed the topic and provided relevant suggestions; however, your response could be structured more effectively. Aim to have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each body paragraph should have a clear main idea supported by examples or explanations.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure you fully extend and support your ideas. While you have provided some examples, they could be developed further. Additionally, ensure that you directly address the question posed throughout your essay, not just in the concluding statement.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas. There are some areas in the essay where the flow of information feels abrupt. Transition more smoothly between sentences and ideas to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Revise the essay for minor grammatical errors and typos to improve clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, punctuation, and sentence construction.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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