Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to studying your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me.

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Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to

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your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me. I would like to suggest that you should write some facts about the programme.

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curriculum. If I do not know it, I can not join because I live far from your city. But I know your online courses are so excellent. I am fond of your course. I think you are careful

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my request. Thanks for you. Sincerely Sarah.

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coherence and cohesion

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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105 words

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Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to studying your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me.

Fully explain your ideas

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