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Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to studying your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me.

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Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to
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 your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me. I would like to suggest that you should write some facts about the programme.
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 I will organize to participate because I have no knowledge
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 curriculum. If I do not know it, I can not join because I live far from your city. But I know your online courses are so excellent. I am fond of your course. I think you are careful
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 my request. Thanks for you. Sincerely Sarah.
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas are developed with explanations and relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your letter logically with clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose (e.g., introduction, requesting information, explaining your situation).
coherence and cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively within and across sentences.
task achievement
Make sure to include a proper closing paragraph that summarizes your request and thanks the recipient in advance for their help.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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