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You have had a problem with your next-door neighbour. You have not been able to speak to your neighbor about this. Write a letter to this neighbor. In your letter Explain the problem Suggest a solution Say what action you will take if the situation does not improve

#neighbour #neighbor #action #situation
Dear Madam, I am writing in order to complain about a
dog
 that's living
together with
 you. I
comprehend
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 your condition
,
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 because you are living alone these days and you need the
dog
for being
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to be
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 always with you.
However
, you should take
a
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control of your pet. Actually, my little brother enjoyed playing with domestic animals, especially dogs and cats. But I think
,
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he won't
spent
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spend
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 his time with dogs anymore. Because your
dog
 pursued my brother and tried to bite him. He fell down on the ground and injured his knee
while
 he was running. Not only my mother
,
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 but
also
 other
neighbors
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neighbours
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 started to
afraid
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be afraid
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 of your
dog
. Because all of them
worrying
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worry
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 about children's health.
In addition
 to
this
, my little sister can't sleep well at
nights
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night
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 because of
barking
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the barking
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 of your
dog
. And she
is crying
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cries
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 a lot during the
days
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day
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. These problems
bothered
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bother
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 most people,
who's
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who are
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 living around you. I suggest you
to
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take more control over it or change your pet. If these situations
happens
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happen
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 again, I will appeal to corresponding places.
Correct the word
Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Nozigul
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph contains one clear main idea, and use appropriate linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Begin your letter with a proper greeting (e.g., 'Dear Mr. Smith' if you know the neighbor's name) and end with an appropriate closing (e.g., 'Yours sincerely').
task achievement
Make sure to include a clear explanation of the problem, a polite suggestion for a solution, and mention the action you will take politely and without sounding threatening. This will increase the task achievement score.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter. Avoid using phrases that could come across as demanding or aggressive to ensure the tone is appropriate for the situation.
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