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Some people belives that government should pay full courses fee of university students. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #belives #government #courses #fee #university #students
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 of
community
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communities
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 admit that
administrator
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administrators
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 should be responsible for the allowance of
whole
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the whole
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 academic time period of pupils.
Although
 I completely agree with
notion
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 not only because of improvements
of
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in
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 society
also
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but also
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increas
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 inequality
as well as
 more focus.
This
 essay will explore how these factors justify my opinion.
Initially
, the factor that compelled me to agree with
this
 statement is
enchantment
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the enchantment
an enchantment
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 of
nation
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the nation
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. It will allow the scope of study in people if they know it's free of cost.
Additionally
,basically will be an opportunity for youth to achieve their goals.
According to
 BBC
news
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,the learner who
get
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gets
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 full scholarships
of
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for
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 study
have
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30%better
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a 30%better
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 future.
Secondarly
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Secondly
,the concept of disproportionate will be lead.
Needy
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 community will get a chance to study among the other communities.
Furthermore
,the objection of
destitues
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destitute
 would be ended for rest.
For instance
, a survey named 'equality' proves that
50
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% difference will be
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if wealthy and penniless
society
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societies
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 have
same
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the same
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 opportunities.
Moreover
, the scholars can be more focused on their studies rather than worrying
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 institute payments. They can be mentally relaxed with
this
 offer.
Besides
this
, it will
further
 assist in economy rates.
To sum up
,authorities paying the penalty of education will be a better commitment.
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Make sure your essay has a clear and logical structure, starting with an introduction that clearly states your position, followed by body paragraphs that each contain a single, coherent idea, and a conclusion that summarizes the essay. Use transition words effectively.
task achievement
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Use data and research to support your arguments, making sure that each body paragraph has a clear main idea.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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