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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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Introduction
People have varying
preferance
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preferences
preference
 when it comes to
try
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trying
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 new
things
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,some people enjoy exploring new
places
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 and trying
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of foods,
while
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other
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others
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 find comfort in familiar
routine
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routines
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 and activities.
its
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it's
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 a matter of personal taste and comfort.
This
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 essay explores the merits of both attitudes and
suggest
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 that a
balance
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balanced
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 approach can lead to a more enriching and satisfying
life
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.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, individuals who are interested
to explore
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in exploring
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 new
places
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 and searching for new
resturants
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restaurants
 because they believe that it gives them
confident
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confidence
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 and
thrill
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a thrill
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 in their
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life
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lives
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.
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, once
in
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apply
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a month to explore new food
place
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places
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 and order new foods give them
a
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confidence.
Morever
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Moreover
,
visit to
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visiting
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 a new daring place
and
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take
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taking
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 risk to go for risky
places
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 and
face
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 challenges gives them
a courage
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courage
an act of courage
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 and
it
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apply
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will make
life
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 easier for them.
Body paragraph 2
on the other hand
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, to try
a
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apply
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things
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 and
places
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 is a
wasteage
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wastage
waste
 of money and it
costly
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is costly
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 with no satisfaction.
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, in 2023 dual
british
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British
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 pakistan father
dawood
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 and son
suleman
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Suleman
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 spent half
million
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a million
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 dollars to start a journey in search of
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the titanic
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titanic
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 ship but they lost their lives.Adding more, they believe that testing new
things
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 would cause stress and make them uncertain.
Conclusion
in conclusion, both sides have merits.People who want to explore the world can do it almost without restriction
due to
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humanity
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humanity's
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 progress. Another part of society can keep the usual order of
things
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 in
thier
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their
 business,food
life
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 in general.In my opinion,
choice
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the choice
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 between both sides
depend
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depends
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 on
person
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the person
a person
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structure
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should outline the points you will discuss, the body paragraphs should elaborate on these points with examples, and the conclusion should succinctly summarize your opinion and the points discussed.
cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs together for better coherence. This will help the reader to follow your argument more easily.
argument balance
Address both sides of the argument equally and ensure you provide specific examples for the points you raise. Try to develop each point fully before moving on to the next one.
task response
To improve task achievement, ensure that you respond to all parts of the task. Your essay should discuss both attitudes towards trying new things or sticking with the familiar, and it should also clearly state and support your own opinion.
language
Check for grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors, as these can affect the clarity of your ideas. Consider using varied sentence structures and a range of vocabulary to articulate your points more effectively.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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