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One of your penfriends wants to improve their English at a language school. They have never studied at a language school before and have asked for your advice on how to choose a good one. write a letter to your penfriend, Advise them about the following; the teaching method,the number of students in class and the number of hours per week. write 150 words in 20 minutes.

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Dear Brooke, I hope
this
 email finds you well. It was
sach
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such
a
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apply
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joyful news to hear that you are planning to join
language
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a language
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 school
for learning
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to learn
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 English. Let me suggest you some of the best language schools. Improve Yourself with Us and Learn English,
they
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apply
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have good reviews and I myself
had
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have
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 taken
few
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a few
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 classes from them.
There
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Their
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 teaching method is
quit
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quite
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 easy and they only
enroll
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enrol
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 15 students per class to focus on each student equally.
Moreover
, they provide different schedules and you can select any of them
according to
 your preference. There are in total 15 hours of learning per week and
also
 you can choose
inperson
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in-person
in person
 or online classes. Let me know if you have any concerns and feel free to contact me. Best Regards, Cindy
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task response
Ensure to address all points in the task evenly; teaching method, number of students, and hours per week were mentioned, but more detail could be provided on each point
grammar & vocabulary
Pay attention to spelling and grammar; instead of 'sach,' use 'such,' 'quit' should be 'quite,' and 'there' should be 'their'. Also, be mindful of using formal language appropriate for a letter and avoid using contractions like 'I'm' or informal phrases.
coherence & cohesion
Start a new paragraph when introducing a new idea to increase readability; combine related ideas and keep paragraphs concise.
writing tone
Use a consistent tone throughout the letter. Although the tone is mostly appropriate, ensure not to shift between formal and informal language.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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