The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

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diagram

depicts step by step how olive

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is created.

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, there are seven main steps to produce

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olive

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, those are; picking, rinsing, smashing, bagging, pressing, separating

oil

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and

water

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, and saving

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the

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storage and sale is the

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process.

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with, the olive cherry is harvested and picked by

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a farmer

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farmer

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from

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the

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land. All of them are rinsed with cold

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. it makes sure that the cherry is clean from any contamination. After that, it is

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transferred

to the smashing process by using

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a belt

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conveyor. The result of smashing

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olive paste and olive stones and only olive paste can be continued to the next process, whilst olive stone is left. The olive paste

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then

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transfered into

bag

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a bag

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with holes and

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it is pressed. when it is pressed, the

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will come out from the hole. The

oil

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which has been produced

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still

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water

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content and it should be

sparated

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separated

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a sparator

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sparator

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separator

. After

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and

water

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are

sparated

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separated

, the olive

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then

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transfer

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the

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storage and

ready

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is ready

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to sell

for

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a customer.

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Harvesting
Ripe
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Crushing
Paste
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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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