The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The
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diagram
depicts step by step how olive
oil
is created.
Overall
, there are seven main steps to produce
the
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olive
oil
, those are; picking, rinsing, smashing, bagging, pressing, separating
oil
and
water
, and saving
into
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the
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storage and sale is the
last
process.
to begin
with, the olive cherry is harvested and picked by
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a farmer
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farmer
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from
th
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the
the
agriculture
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land. All of them are rinsed with cold
water
. it makes sure that the cherry is clean from any contamination. After that, it is
transfered
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transferred
to the smashing process by using
belt
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conveyor. The result of smashing
are
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olive paste and olive stones and only olive paste can be continued to the next process, whilst olive stone is left. The olive paste
then
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transfered into
bag
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a bag
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with holes and
then
it is pressed. when it is pressed, the
oil
will come out from the hole. The
oil
which has been produced
is
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still
have
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has
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water
content and it should be
sparated
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separated
with
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a sparator
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sparator
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separator
. After
oil
and
water
are
sparated
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separated
, the olive
oil
then
transfer
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to
the
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storage and
ready
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is ready
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to sell
for
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a customer.
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