The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the manufacturing steps for creating
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, manpower can be minimally used to produce sugar
as machine
can take over almost all of the paramount importance steps. Fix the agreement mistake
machines
On the other hand
, advance
technology is required to develop an all-machine Replace the word
advanced
manufacture
.
Replace the word
manufacturer
Firstly
, after sugar
canes grow for 12-18 months, they
can be harvested by manual Correct pronoun usage
it
labor
or by a specific vehicle used to harvest crops. After that, Change the spelling
labour
sugar
canes are crushed to get all of the juice
of
it. Change preposition
from
Next,
the juice
needs to be purified using limestone
filter to create a purified solution.
Correct article usage
a limestone
The next step is
heating the purified juice
using an evaporator to convert juice
into syrup. The next process is centrifugating the previous product to easily differentiate sugar
crystals from syrup. Finally
, take the sugar
crystals and dry and cool them until they become sugar
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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