The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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The pie charts illustrate how four different products were sold using the online platform in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013.
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, it can be seen that the selling of books and film /music increased and the other two categories travel and clothes lost their population during one decade. In 2003, travelling was the most famous trend among New Zealand citizens
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reading books was the least marked 19 per cent of people.
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, books
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increased by 3
per centage
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in 2013 and travelling decreased significantly in 2013. In 2003, Online films and music shipping was shown at 21 per cent of citizens
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, it gained huge popularity in 2013 by
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of 13.After one decade, online sales of clothing became limited but in the beginning, it was higher than by 8%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • online shopping
  • retail sector
  • New Zealand
  • comparison
  • increase
  • shift
  • traditional
  • popularity
  • platforms
  • technology
  • internet access
  • consumer behavior
  • preferences
  • factors
  • growth
  • impact
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • challenges
  • opportunities
  • future trends
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