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Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

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In recent years the number of people travelling abroad
for
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to
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 learn a foreign
language
is
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increasing
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.There is an opportunity to learn the
language
 more deeply by talking with
for
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foreigners abroad.
Also
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 payments to cause trouble at studying abroad. On the one hand, there are advantages of studying abroad. To explain , it will be easier for us to learn a foreign
language
 if we
talking
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talk
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 with foreigners. And we can easily manage to speak a foreign
language
.
Although
, studying abroad is expensive,
can
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one can
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 make ends meet by finding
part time
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part-time
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 jobs. Through work and
school
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school,
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 they can communicate and make friends.
As a result
, they feel less homesick.
For example
, I hardly miss home after
meet
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 my new friends, they
spending
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 time
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with
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them. If,
in contrast
, I didn't go
to
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abroad and didn't work, I would be alone without knowledge and without friends.
On the other hand
, abroad studying can cause some problems. The main and prominent
disadvantages
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disadvantage
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 is the lack of funds.
That is
, there will be daily expenses
along with
 flight fees and tuition fees. Money is
also
 needed
food
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 and accommodation. Studying abroad is expensive.
As a result
, you may end up homeless,
hungry
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and hungry
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 or you may not get quality education
due to
 lack of funds.
For example
, my brother studied abroad but he passed the exam. If,
in contrast
, we didn't spend so much of our money abroad, we would be learning from the most experienced
teacher
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teachers
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 in our country. Studying abroad
give
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 us
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
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 to speak with foreigners and learn a foreign
language
 well but on the downside, we are short on funds and we are homesick.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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