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You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social event's orgainser. Write a letter to the Training Orgainser: -Expressing your interest in the role. -Requesting more information about it. -Explain what experience you have.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you because I want to become an event
organizer
. I
interested
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 in
this
 course. I want to be
organizer
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an organizer
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. I think,
be
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organizer
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 is not very easy.
However
, I am ready
to
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this
 work I do not
completly
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completely
 know about
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organizer
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. Can you
give
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 me about it ?
Moreover
, need
a
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your
advise
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 to me. What does need
for
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 be
organizer
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an organizer
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.
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need
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to
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 me about
this
 work. Is not
this
 complex work. I have
an average limit experiences
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.
Moreover
, I studied
a
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high university. I want to be
organizer
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, too. Because I like it.
This
 website is so well in
UK
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the UK
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. Organizers are better than
another jobs
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. There
are
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my
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enough experience
for
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to do it. I am very
interesting
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this
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in this
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 job. I will
wait
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 your answer. Yours faithfully, Ruzikhulov Obidjon
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greeting and closing
Begin your letter with a proper salutation and end it with an appropriate closing statement, maintaining a polite and professional tone throughout.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity and organization in your writing.
complete response
Expand upon and clarify your request for more information and advice regarding the role of the social event organizer.
suitable writing tone
It's essential to maintain a formal and appropriate tone to suit the context of writing a professional letter.
logical structure
To improve coherence, try to connect your ideas and paragraphs logically, using transitions and cohesive devices effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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