The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement- making process , and how cement us used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement- making process , and how cement us used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The diagrams illustrate the stages and equipment used in
cement
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production
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and concrete
production
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. I will explain
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production
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process in the following paragraphs in detail.
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, the manufacturing of
cement
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consists of various tools
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as a mixer, rotating heater, crusher and grinder
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four materials are used for concrete
production
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. To start, in
cement
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production
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the process starts with limestone and clay
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crushed and transformed into powder and later it passes to a rotating heater through a mixer.
Powder
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The powder
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is mixed and heated,
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a grinder is used to make
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from the heated powder. Those
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powders are packed in bags for future use. Next is concrete manufacturing , in concrete manufacture different materials are used to produce
cement
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, including
cement
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15%, 25% of sand ,50% of gravel which is small stones and 10% of water are put into the concrete mixer and
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it
finally
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produced end product which is concrete.
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