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You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter, » explain why you are writing » express concern about the missing card » ask them what they intend to do

#bank #receipt #card #envelope #head #office #concern
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter
 in
the
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response
for
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letter
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a letter
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 I received today from TD
Bank
. The
letter
 includes the receipt of a new
bank
card
 that I ordered on 24th
Janurary
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January
 2024. Unfortunately, I did not
received
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 any
card
 with that
letter
. The
card
 I ordered was a new Debit
Card
 as my previous
card
got
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expired
this
 month and I was not able to make any payments. In
morning
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, I received the
letter
 and the envelope was not in
a
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good condition and was very easy to open. When I checked the
letter
 it was only having the acknowledge receipt and no
bank
card
.
Moreover
, I tried to contact
courier
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the courier
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 service but
unluckly
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unluckily
luckily
 they had no clues regarding that. My only concern is the
card
 should not go
in
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wrong
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the wrong
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 hands. I hope you will address
this
 concern as soon as possible and would request you to block my new
card
.
Along with
 that, I want to apply for a new
bank
card
 and
this
 time it would be great if I
can
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 get that in 2 to 3 business days as
this
 disrupts my other transactions. Yours faithfully, Siya
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Enhance task achievement by including more detailed information about the initial order or any follow-up actions that have been taken.
task achievement
Work on checking the letter for minor errors in spelling or grammar to convey a polished and professional correspondence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • acknowledge receipt
  • compromised security
  • unauthorized transactions
  • identity theft
  • reissue
  • secure (the account)
  • fraudulent activity
  • account holder
  • security measures
  • customer service
  • follow-up
  • discrepancy
  • escalate the issue
  • trace the delivery
  • account security
  • financial risk
  • confidential
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