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Grammar
Ensure consistency in the tense used throughout the essay to maintain coherence. Shifts from past to present tense can be confusing for the reader.
Cohesion
To improve cohesion, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively (e.g., however, therefore, additionally, on the other hand).
Development
Develop your main points further with more specific details and examples. This will help strengthen your argument and make your ideas clearer.
Task Response
Address the task more directly by offering a more balanced view on both sides of the argument. Clearly state whether the development is largely positive or negative and explain why.
Task Response
Avoid general statements without support. Try to provide evidence or a brief explanation for your claims to make your essay more persuasive.
Conclusion
For your conclusion, summarise the main points more effectively, ensuring that you clearly state your own view on whether you believe it to be a positive or negative development.
Paragraphing
Use paragraphs to structure your essay effectively. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea and be followed by support or examples.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite