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In the future, self driving cars will replace human drives. Is that a positive or negative development

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Undoubtedly, technology has spread its arms in every sector to a great extent and communication and advanced automobiles are no exception
Driverless
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cars
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 will be everywhere in upcoming years, and
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 will bring many
benefits
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. I believe the advantages of
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cars
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 will far outweigh the disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
driverless
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cars
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. One of the primary
benefits
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 of
driverless
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cars
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 is the low rate of accident rate because they use rules and regulations on the dot rather than humans.
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, a system has replaced
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every
driverless
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 car how to admit rules and regulations on the road, and
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 they can sense any kind of mistake on the way and will action as necessary.
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, traffic congestion will be decreased significantly.
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, disabled people who meet with an accident, cannot drive vehicles they own.
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,
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 is
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 opportunity for them to get their
freedom
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 as they want because sometimes they have to clinic once a month, So,it is essential to go there destination without
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trouble and bothering others. Apart from that, When we consider a long journey, we can reach more advantages because
freedom
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 can be achieved the whole journey and there is no tiredness
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 the journey. So end of the trip,
benefits
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 can be obtained including
freedom
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. In conclusion, I remain convinced that
driverless
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cars
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 have more
benefits
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such
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 as mitigating traffic congestion, enjoying
freedom
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 and disabled people do not worry about their condition and transportation. In the near
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 it will be abundant
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 corner of the world.
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To improve task achievement, ensure to fully address the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative development aspects of the topic. Include specific examples that illustrate your points and make your argument more persuasive. Ensure that all parts of the question are answered and that your position is clear throughout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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