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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents some information about
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the average
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average
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the average
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 monthly change in prices of
such
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 metals as copper, nickel and zinc.
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Also
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 there is
comparing
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a comparison
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 in percentage changes
depended
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depending
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 on every
month
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. The dates are available for 2014. As a distinguishing quality, it is clearly seen from the image that the rates of each metal
falled
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fell
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 down in May after a long decrease from January, excluding the share of the Zinc changes, which had increased from one in January to three in the next
month
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, which is February. For a primary example, the rate of the Nickel price changes was approximately 0,5 in May and the Copper percentage was about -0,5 in the same
month
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. As for the maximum, the highest point of
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 diagram suits Nickel price development.
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, the share
equaled
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 6 in January
month
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. A particular feature to highlight is that after a large amount of ups and downs of every metal
prices
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price
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, there are almost similar rates
at the end
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 of the period of study. They are in diapason from 1 -2.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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