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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many people in four South East Asian Countries (Philippines,
Malaysia
, Thailand, Indonesia)
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live in cities between 1970 and 2020,
along with
 predictions for 2030 and 2040. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, the number of people who live in
Malaysia
, Thailand and Indonesia kept increasing over the given period. Meanwhile, the sole country in which citizens live in the city fluctuated over the same period
is
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 The Philippines.
Initially
, in 1970, the amount of people living in the city in
Malaysia
 and the Philippines
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 similar, which are 30% of the total population each.
However
, over the next four decades, the former witnessed an increase in proportion,
while
 the latter faced a slight decrease and fell to under 50%. Thailand experienced a similar range of growth to
Malaysia
 with a lower percentage throughout the year,
whereas
 Indonesia stuck at the bottom until the end by barely reaching 50% in total.
Additionally
, it is presented in the data that the population of citizens living in the city in all four countries will continue to increase gradually until the year 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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