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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts describe the
owership
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ownership
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computer
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computers
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according to
years
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year
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 and education level. Overview, the percentage of
computer
owers
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owners
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 by
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the years
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years
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year
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was show
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 increasing trends,
whereas
, for education,
maximum
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the maximum
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computer
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number of computer
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holder's
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holders
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was in 2010
as
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campare
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compared
compare
 to 2002. As per the given information, in 2002 and 2004 the
owership
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ownership
 of
computer
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computers
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 was below
than
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apply
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60% which
raise
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rose
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 by just 5% in
next
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the next
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 4
years
, surprisingly, it reached
at
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a
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 peak
around
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of around
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 80% in 2010. Shifting towards the next detail,
in
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no high school diploma has differences of almost 20% in
the
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apply
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computer
 ownership between both
years
, in which
latter
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the latter
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 strand for
highest
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the highest
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 approximately 40%.
Likewise
,
in
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high school graduates
have
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had
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nearby
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nearly
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 60% of
computer
 services in 2010,
whilest
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while
, in 2002 it was roughly 20% less from it. In
contrary
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contrast
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, incomplete
college
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colleges
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 has 55% and 88%
computer
holder's
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holders
holder
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 in 2002 and 2010
orderly
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apply
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. Interestingly, in bachelor and postgraduate
college
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colleges
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 having
owership
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ownership
 of
computer
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a computer
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 was nearly
same
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the same
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 with 80% in 2002 and 90% in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer ownership
  • percentage of the population
  • level of education
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • no-qualification
  • secondary
  • post-secondary
  • graduate education
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancement
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • statistical data
  • data interpretation
  • significant growth
  • fluctuations
  • proliferation
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