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Many people choose to traverl abroad to learn a foreign languagle instead of studying in their home town.

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Introduction
 Many human pick to trip foreign to learn a
foreiger
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foreign
foreigner
 tongue
instead
 of reading in their house small town.I will tell you the
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advantages
 and disadvantages of
this
 in the next sections. Body1 On the one hand,there are several benefits of travel too.The first merit of it is
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considered
 to be that it is a cultural pastime for people and everyone likes it.
For instance
, at least once a year,people have the right to have
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 vacation.
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 good thing,it opens a person's
language
, even if it's only for a week, if you come to a place, you know the pleasure of it.Another positive aspect is thought to be that it is very beneficial for your health.
That is
 because the air of the foreign country is very clean and the cities are very beautiful, in
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 they are amazing. Bady2
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 it
also
 has many disadvantages .
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 of the major
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disadvantages
disadvantage
 of it is
that is
 to find accommodation.
For example
, he may get lost because he does not know the city well. To go there you need to learn the
language
 because if you don'
t
 know the
language
 you can'
t
 live there. Another important demerit is that it comes down to money, if you don'
t
 have money, you won'
t
 go there.
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Conclusion
 Many
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secret
to journey overseas to learn
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externl
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external
language
instead
 of studying in their home town.I good mention
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advantages
 and and disadvantages of
this
 in the next part.
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