The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year
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the pie charts illustrate the amount of electricity generated by energy
source
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sources
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in Scotland for 20
years
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ago and
last
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year
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.
overall
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, the pie charts demonstrate both
amount
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amounts
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of electricity generated in
scotland
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Scotland
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but the first for 20
years
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ago, the second for
last
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yeas
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year
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. these were energy sources
such
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as
:
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apply
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hydro pumped
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hydro-pumped
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storage, gas, other renewables, nuclear,
hydro
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natural flow, oil,
coal
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and coal
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. for 20
years
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ago
hydro
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pumped storage(3.1%),
hydro
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natural flow(8.7%) gas(22.3%) and coal(22.2%) were more
whereas
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for
last
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year
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hydro
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pumped storage was 2.2
per
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cent
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,
hydro
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natural flow was 7.9 per
cent
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, gas was 21.7 per
cent
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and coal was 32.7 per
cent
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.
although
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for
last
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year
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other sources were more in comparison with 20
years
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ago because for
last
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year
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oil(4%), nuclear(26.4%),
other
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and other
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renewables(5.1%) when for 20
years
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ago oil was 2.1 per
cent
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, nuclear was 19.6 per
cent
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and other renewables were 2.8 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, year, hydro, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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