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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The chart illustrates how much
spent
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 on six consumer goods, namely personal stereos, Tennis racquets, Perfumes,
CDs
, Tays and Photographic
film
is
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in
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 some European countries. In general, what stands out from the chart is that
,
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apply
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Britain
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Britain's
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 amount
of
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money
 spent much more than other countries
in
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on
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 products,
Germany
 is the lowest
in
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on
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CDs
, Tays and Photographic
film
.
However
, Italy,
France
 and
Germany
 how much
money
 paid out almost
equal
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equally
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. Looking at the details, Britain purchased
CDs
, Tays and Photographic
film
 significantly improved above 160 and other products spent
money
 under 160. After that,
Germany
 is similar
Italy
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to Italy
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 and
France
 in Personal stereos but in
Tennis
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Tennis,
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racquetes
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racquets
racquet
 is twice as
many
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much
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France
 spent
money
 as.
Next,
Germany
 is the lowest buyer
CDs
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of CDs
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 almost 145. With regards to, Italy and
France
, the former is similar in
France
 in four
consumer
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consumers
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 and in Personal stereos, Tennis racquets and Perfumes is higher than
Germany
 and Italy .
On the other hand
, the latter how much
money
 Photographic
film
 above 160.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cds, film, money, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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