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The table shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions

The table shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions
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The table depicts the
number
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 of movie
views
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 at cinemas
according to
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 four genres in India, Ireland, New Zealand, and
Japan
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.
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, the highest
number
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 of
cinema
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 viewing
is belong
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 to India by far,
while
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 the numbers of
action
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 films'
views
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 are significantly higher than other categories in all countries. The highest
number
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 of
cinema
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views
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 is
occured
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occurred
 by Indians with 24.5
million
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 total
views
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, and the most
most
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apply
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significant categories of choices are
action
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 and romance with 8 and 7.5
million
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views
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 respectively. In Ireland, the total
number
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 of
cinema
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 viewing
for
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films is just over 23
million
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 total
views
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, representing the second highest compared to its counterparts. Horror and
action
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 movies make
the
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 vast majority of the total
views
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 with 7.6 and almost 6.5
million
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views
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 by Irish
audience
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audiences
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. In New Zealand and
Japan
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, individuals
shows
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show
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 similar distribution for
action
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, romance, and comedy films.
While
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 the
number
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 of horror
movies'
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movies
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views
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 is 4.7
million
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views
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 in New Zealand,
this
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 figure is lower for
Japan
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 with 2.2
million
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views
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.
Japan
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is
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has
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 the lowest
participated
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 country for watching movies at
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cinema
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the cinema
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 compared to others with almost 18
million
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views
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, views, japan, cinema, action, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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