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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages of renting a home? Should governments subsidies house prices for first home buyers?

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There are a
lot
 of countries, in which the population prefers to rent a
house
instead
 of buy one. The idea of renting houses lets the person be free of
taxes
.
however
, the
government
 system should invest in creating a project to support
people
 who want to buy a
house
according to
 the economic level. Renting a
house
 is beneficial for one and a nightmare for another since a
lot
 of
people
 think that buying and later renting that
house
 is a business, which will make
money
, and with that
money
 allows them to pay tax-
house
 easily because in some countries the
taxes
 increase significantly every year. In that case, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, because the
house
 in the future will be off of
debts
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debt
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, and will become in familiar patrimonio.
Nonetheless
, there are a
lot
 of other groups of
people
 who believe that buying a
house
 is a
lot
 of
money
 to invest and prefer to keep paying rent and not a complicated
life
 with
government
taxes
, deductions, and often maintenance, living
life
 just with the necessary daily.
However
, there are a
lot
 group of
people
 who think that buying a
house
 is secure for oldness, and work the most of
life
 to save enough
money
 to keep the opportunity to buy the
house
, since they think, that the monthly rent can become in monthly fee for their own
house
 which will be with them for the rest of
life
.
Although
Correct word choice
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, buying a
house
 in an undeveloped country is not an easy task, seeing as the first payment is high and the credit history is not strong enough to ask the bank for financial. That's why, buying a
house
 becomes a dream and in those cases, the
government
 could help with subsidies, depending on the economic sector of each family.
For example
, Colombia has a
house
-support program, which allows participating for a
house
 bonus, depending on the salary of the family
that is
 applying. In conclusion, renting a
house
 is the opportunity to not pay
taxes
, but for
other
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others
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ones
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 is a dream to spend the rest of
life
Correct pronoun usage
their life
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 there, but do not have the
money
 to buy the property, and need to look for
government
 aims and that case is where the system needs to create and suitable evaluation of the participant and help with the subsidy
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