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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
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The two maps illustrate some explicit and mild changes
of
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in

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a
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Frenton in two periods of time namely 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, The Frenton was modernized into a
tourism appealing
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tourism-appealing

It seems that tourism appealing is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 area. In terms of radical shifts, in the Eastern central area was located a cafe and park which was converted into a hotel and golf course. With regard to Houses, lying to the eastern edge of the map
experience
Wrong verb form
experienced

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 a transformation into Blocks of
flats
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, A new
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flats
Change the noun form
flat

The subject or subject complement of the sentence (flats) does not appear to agree with the verb was. Consider changing the noun form.

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was
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were

The verb was does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 built
at
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in

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 the
North- west
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Northwest

The word North- west seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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 of the blocks of
flats
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 and
at
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on

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North
Correct article usage
the North

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of
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apply

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map
Add an article
the map
a map

The noun phrase map seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 they demolished Playing fields with trees to build the second blocks of
flats
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. Regarding the Theater and shops which were located at the South-east corner, they were redesignated to become the cinema and supermarket. With respect to The hospital which was situated
the
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 Western center was expanded by approximately 3 times compared to its original size. In terms of the Bank which was located adjacent to the hospital, it was not only redesignated to a restaurant but
also
Linking Words

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 expanded slightly.Regarding mild shift, to the north-east corner which had been Trees was restored to become the Technopark
Moreover
Linking Words

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, The School, library and
The
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high street
were remained
Change to the active voice
remained
have remained

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Vocabulary: Replace the words flats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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