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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
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The two maps illustrate some explicit and mild changes
of
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Frenton in two periods of time namely 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, The Frenton was modernized into a
tourism appealing
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 area. In terms of radical shifts, in the Eastern central area was located a cafe and park which was converted into a hotel and golf course. With regard to Houses, lying to the eastern edge of the map
experience
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 a transformation into Blocks of
flats
, A new
flats
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was
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 built
at
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 the
North- west
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 of the blocks of
flats
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at
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North
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map
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 they demolished Playing fields with trees to build the second blocks of
flats
. Regarding the Theater and shops which were located at the South-east corner, they were redesignated to become the cinema and supermarket. With respect to The hospital which was situated
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 Western center was expanded by approximately 3 times compared to its original size. In terms of the Bank which was located adjacent to the hospital, it was not only redesignated to a restaurant but
also
 expanded slightly.Regarding mild shift, to the north-east corner which had been Trees was restored to become the Technopark
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, The School, library and
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high street
were remained
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 the same
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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