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The graph shows changes in the proportion of Internet users in three different countries from 1999 to 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows changes in the proportion of Internet users in three different countries from 1999 to 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts changes in the proportion of people who are using
internet
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the internet
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 grouped in three different countries from 1999 to 2009. Generally, the people of Canada had the greatest percentage of
Internet
users
compare
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compared
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 to other countries. But, the statistic in Mexico shows that they had the lowest
number
 of
internet
users
. It can be seen that
,
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apply
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 the statistic for Canadian
internet
users
 from 1999 to 2001 had been
increase
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increasing
increased
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 gradually to 30 per
cent
.
Then
 it kept growing dramatically to 2003
approximately
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at approximately
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 60 per
cent
, since
then
, the
number
 kept increasing until
they
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they are
they were
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 able to
reached
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reach
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 100 per
cent
 of their population.
Moreover
, in
USA
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the USA
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 they already had a good start, because stood at 1999 they were able to hit 20 per
cent
 of the citizens.
Then
, from 2001 to 2005 the statistic increased gradually to 70 per
cent
. After
that
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that,
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 there were not any huge changes, because from 2005 to 2009 the
number
 increased to only 80 per
cent
 of their population.
However
, in
Mexico
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Mexico,
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it is clear that
 they had the fewest
of
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apply
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Internet
users
. From 1999 to 2001 there
was
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were
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 only a
little
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few
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 changes that only hit 10 per
cent
, the situation changed from 2001 to 2005 because the
number
 rose
around
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to around
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 30 per
cent
.
Then
,
stood at
Verb problem
from
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 2005 until 2009 the proportion of
Internet
users
 increased gradually
around
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to around
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 40 per
cent
 of their population.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, users, number, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • users
  • Internet
  • trend
  • fluctuated
  • increased
  • remained stable
  • growth rate
  • sharp increase
  • anomalies
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • comparisons
  • initial
  • subsequent
  • consistently
  • peaked
  • plateaued
  • significance
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