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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
In the present day,
education
 is one of the most important
field
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 in a
country
. Formal
education
 should
can
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be accessed by many people from different
status
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 and can not be a leisure thing. In my opinion, I firmly agree that
education
 should be free of cost without comparing one of each other financial status.
To begin
 with,
education
 is one of
fundamental
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 rights for everyone, and it should be costless, so
education
 can be accessible
by
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 many
part
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 of
community
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the community
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. And
also
, educated people can be beneficial for the growth of the
country
 as they provided with
lot
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 of skills and
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
Furthermore
,
education
 can help a family in poverty and give them opportunities for a better future.
Additionaly
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,
education
 will help a
country
 to gain
the
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human resources so they can compete in
regional
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 and international
section
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 and develop the economy
in
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 their
country
. In conclusion,
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i
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 believe that
education
 is not a luxury thing and should be provided and
can be
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accessed by everyone from all strata, so it can
be benefits
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 not only for themselves but
also
 for the
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nation
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 growth.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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