level of youth crime is increasing day by day aroun the world. Give some reasons and some sollutions to stop it.

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recent years, crime committed by adolescents
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has been increasing worldwide.
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essay will cover on causes and solutions of the problem. With more financial burdens, young parents have less
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the opportunity to be taught how to be
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good
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of society
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the parents, especially manners and a good mindset.
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exposure
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online is potentially another main reason
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teenagers. Because of
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of the platform, if they were able to access
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the contents, the more they would see the same type of information. It could
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those behaviours in the real world. In order to tackle
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the issue, more support from grandparents might be a crucial solution, as grandparents can be a great substitution for parents from
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more experience in life, good
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from them could be beneficial to the child.
In addition
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crime
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younger people
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less
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with family
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with the influence of illicit information online.
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family participation in taking care of the young ones,
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to be more strictly
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