The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate six different types of work,
such
as craft, professional, and non-manual, compared between female and male employees in the UK in 1992. The measurements were given in
percentage
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. At a glance, what stands out from the given figures is that
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employment of professional workers dominated in both sexes, that of general
labours
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accounted for the lowest
proportion
. Looking
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the percentage of female employees, more closely,
while
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the
proportion
of clerical employees took the greatest numbers at 31, followed by that of manager, craft, non-manual, and manual, at 29, 27, 9, and 3, respectively, it is interested to note that general labours employment rate accounted for only 1.
Similarly
to the ratio of male workers, the category of
labours
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who worked in general category was taken the lowest
proportion
at solely 2;
however
, the
proportion
of managerial workers was predominant which accounted for 36, followed by other manual, craft, non-manual, and clerical employment.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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