Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their hometown. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, many
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are choosing to learn a foreign
language
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abroad than studying in their hometown. I believe that studying abroad is a popular choice among individuals today. There are several advantages to studying abroad.
Firstly
, if humans
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study
foreign
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a foreign
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language
in
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abroad, they learn more knowledge about different cultures.
Besides
that, they may have more opportunities. Because they have to high quality level. In
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,
people
can learn about various
traditional
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and customs.
Moreover
, it can help to become self-confident and to live in different situations and they recognize with good things and bad things in every society
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know various
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traditions
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of every society.
For instance
, my brother is studying a foreign
language
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abroad. He recognizes with traditional, life of
this
country. His
language
skill
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and knowledge improved
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these days than
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days.
On the other hand
, one of the main disadvantages of studying abroad
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in a different place and culture.
Besides
that, they can be
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distance
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from family and
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relatives
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. They may face
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bad situations
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as
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unhealthy food, bad weather and other situations. And they aren't enough money.
Furthermore
, they face
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many problems.
As a result
, self-confidence may be self-destructive. In a foreign is very difficult
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a friend
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people
.
For example
, many students are studying in
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America. Humans earn hard here. And
people
are not friendly and sociable. In conclusion, studying abroad is a good choice, but individuals should think
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advantages and disadvantages which should decide whether to enter to foreign university.
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