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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The following diagram illustrates the proportions of pupils participating
four
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in four
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 secondary school types in 2000, 2005 and 2009.
According to
 the chart, we have specialist
schools
,
grammer
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grammar
schools
, voluntary
schools
 and community
schools
. It is conspicuous
slightly
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that slightly
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 over
than
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apply
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one in
second
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a second
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 of students studied at
voluntary-controled
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voluntary-controlled
voluntary-control
schools
.
Also
, around 40 percent the young people
prefer
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preferred
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 to have
this
 class in 2005 and one in
quarter
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a quarter
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 attended
in
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apply
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this
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these
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schools
 in 2009.
Moreover
, 12
percent
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per cent
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 of pupils participated in community
schools
.
Furthermore
, in 2005 the
youngesters
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youngsters
 attended
in
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apply
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it.
In addition
, it is obvious for
grammer
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grammar
schools
 we have a descending trend
as well as
 specialist
schools
. In conclusion,
this
 table
inform
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informs
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 the number of students attending four
secondry
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secondary
 school types.
This
 table demonstrates all of these
schools
 except community
schools
 have
descending
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a descending
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 trend.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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