Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside.

Nowadays, the choice of living is a difficult decision to make. A wide range of factors are involved in the making of
this
decision.
Although
some people prefer
the
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city
life
, others might favour the country
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.
This
essay is going to address the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big
city
. One advantage is that the
city
life
presents a range of opportunities.
For example
, there are many cinemas, museums and restaurants to choose from. what is more, in urbanized areas the employment prospects would be diverse, with factories, businesses and retail providing jobs.
Furthermore
, by far better access to education in the
city
is ensured by
collages
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, universities and a wider choice of public and
privates
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schools.
Finally
, health care could
also
be superior as there are more hospitals ,doctors and clinics.
However
, some people have strong objections to living in the
city
. One of their main arguments is the poor air quality resulting from greenhouse gases emitted by factories and households. Most would agree that the crime rate is much higher in urban areas. In big cities
the
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burglary and street crime
is
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increasingly becoming more common
whereas
in rural and
small town
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communities people tend to look after each other.
Also
, traffic jams in densely populated
area
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areas
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are the norm when travelling to work or school can take a long time. Heavy traffic
also
contributes to the pollution problem.
Lastly
, Cities can be very expensive places to live since finding affordable housing may present a challenge and everyday living expenses are generally higher than those in the country. To
sumup
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sum up
, living in the
city
represents
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a wider variety of opportunities for work or leisure. That being said, the
city
symbolizes the drawbacks of modern
life
. I believe
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is
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more benefits than others.
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task achievement
Be sure to address both sides of the comparison. The essay discusses living in the city well but only touches lightly on rural living. Include more about rural life to fully respond to the task.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices and paragraph structures to improve the flow of the essay. While some elements are present, their use could be more sophisticated to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Support main points with more detailed and specific examples. For both city and rural living, provide concrete instances or statistics to strengthen your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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