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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.
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The line graph shows how many people visited four museums in different countries in the world between 1980 and 2015. All in all, the Egyptian
Museum
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 was the most popular, with between approximately 8 and 9
million
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visitors
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 each year. The least popular were the Hermitage and the National
Museum
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 of Anthropology, with no more than 4
million
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visitors
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 each year. The
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visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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 to the National
Museum
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 of Anthropology decreased slowly from just over 4
million
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 in 1980 to around 2
million
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 in 2015.
By contrast
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, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 to the Tokyo National
Museum
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 increased from just under 5
million
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 in 1980 to around 9
million
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 in 2015.
In addition
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, the number of
visitors
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 to the Hermitage stayed about the same over the
thirty-five year
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thirty-five-year
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 period. They fell from just under 4
million
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 in 1980 to just over 3
million
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 in 2000 and
then
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 rose to just under 4
million
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 again in 2015.
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