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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.Thetable shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.Thetable shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The two charts illustrate a country's exports in diverse categories, including petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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, and textiles from 2015 until 2016. The bar chart displays export earnings,
while
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, the table shows changes in values.
To begin
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 with, four out of five categories experienced growth in 2016. The textile was the first with up to 15.24% increased value, it achieved
earning
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earnings
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 of about over 30
million
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 in the same year. It was followed by engineered goods and petroleum
products
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 with 8.5% and 3% rose in value respectively. Both of them earned the most with over 60
million
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 through exports.
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, at the lowest place, there was the agriculture
products
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 category with a mere 0.81% surge and a little growth in income of over 30
million
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.
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, gems and jewellery were the only ones which had a drop in values of about 5.18% in 2016.
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, it was similar to its export earnings which accumulated just a little over 40
million
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 in the same year.
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, there is a correlation between export earnings and changes in values in each category.
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