The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981-2007.
The line graph describes how much the three kinds of jams, margarine, butter, plus low fat and reduced spreads consumed by the people between 1981 and 2007 in one Asian country.
Overall
, all jams experienced a gradual decline in certain timeline
. Fix the agreement mistake
timelines
Firstly
, the butter was consistently dropping from 1986 to 2007. Secondly
, in the first 5 years
margarine Add a comma
years,
was declining
until it rose steadily from 1986. Wrong verb form
declined
Thirdly
, the low fat jam dramatically increased in 1996 and peaked in 2001 until dropped gradually for 6 years
to 2007.
Looking at the chart in more detail, the butter started at 140 grams
and went up to 160 grams
in 5 years
until it kept dropping for 21 years
, from 100,
to 70, and bottomed at 50 Remove the comma
apply
grams
.
On the other hand
, margarine grew steadily with a slight drop from 95 to 80 grams
, then
gradually increased to 100 grams
in 1991. The amount remained steadily
Change the word
steady
to
1996 until it went down to 80 Change preposition
until
grams
and finally
40 grams
in the last
recorded year.
The low fat spread started its journey in 1996 and surged for
about 70 Change preposition
to
grams
in 2001 which recorded
to be its peak condition, but slightly decreased to 70 in 2007.Add a missing verb
was recorded
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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