Older people often choose to spend their money on themselves (e.g., on holiday) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?
It is true that older generations prefer to live on their own terms in spite of
put
their money aside for their juveniles. Older individuals choose to spend more money on themselves, their needs and Change the verb form
putting
wishes
, Correct pronoun usage
their wishes
instead
of Linking Words
economize
, giving them to their minors, and I believe there are both positive and negative effects.
First and foremost, the importance of living for our desires is quite beneficial for a brave and healthy life, that makes us alive, gives us motivation and maintain Wrong verb form
economising
physical
condition. Correct pronoun usage
our physical
For instance
, many older members of society have Linking Words
chronical
diseases, Correct your spelling
chronic
such
as diabetes, cardiovascular disease or even depression which Linking Words
is
most common among the older generations. Change the verb form
are
That is
why mental health and Linking Words
satisfactory
life Correct article usage
a satisfactory
of
Change preposition
for
elderly
should be taken seriously. Spending your personal capital to ensure your own health is the first necessary step for any person.
Correct article usage
the elderly
On the other hand
, the importance of family support is another level. It is true that we should take Linking Words
care
of ourselves, Use synonyms
Linking Words
however
we should be parents Add a comma
however,
for
our children the same and give them Change preposition
to
wonderful
future, even for grandchildren. As we Correct article usage
a wonderful
care
about our family, so will their members Use synonyms
care
about us. Use synonyms
For example
, parents might sponsor the purchase of property, babysitting, and education. These things would be enough for a better standard of living.
Linking Words
To sum up
, nowadays elderly individuals really Linking Words
care
more about themselves and their desires, but if we are Use synonyms
concerning
family morals, we should be quite supportive and understanding. Replace the word
concerned with
For
Linking Words
this
reason, the quality of selfishness is not that attributive in Linking Words
this
case.Linking Words
Submitted by acaitaz on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
You have addressed the question but should expand on each main point with more relevant, detailed examples and explanations to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Try to develop clearer topic sentences that directly relate to the question, and use a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively.